tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post112983460130033500..comments2024-01-05T17:25:30.703+00:00Comments on Blah blah blah: Setting myself up for a fall?paulhdhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07927319711682494407noreply@blogger.comBlogger10125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129996930018127062005-10-22T17:02:00.000+01:002005-10-22T17:02:00.000+01:00Cheers Paul, Danny (I wish it was fully formed, bu...Cheers Paul, Danny (I wish it was fully formed, but I'll certainly settle for 'hey, I like where this is going, better take advantage of it') Trying to conjure scenes with minimal description is a bit of a goal of mine, and I imagine a later draft will see the word count of the posted chunk reduced by about 20%<BR/>The magic realism thing is unintentional as it's a genre I've never been able to get away with even though I very much want to like it (David Almond is the closest I get), more on that later....<BR/>Although the origin of the trees is pretty set in my mind I had dabbled with alternatives, I would've liked to give the story a strong Miyasaki of nature in revolt but it's not the way I work and I think it would be a mistake to force it or even just steal surface elements from someone far better than me. On the other hand I hope it'll show his influence.<BR/>Anyway, I geuess I'd better get on with writing the thing instead of writing about it!paulhdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07927319711682494407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129983020500536152005-10-22T13:10:00.000+01:002005-10-22T13:10:00.000+01:00Yeah, it seems to have just dropped fully formed o...Yeah, it seems to have just dropped fully formed onto the page, kind of fitting given the story in question...<BR/>Really strong stuff...Dannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11783924982506695153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129933503087840362005-10-21T23:25:00.000+01:002005-10-21T23:25:00.000+01:00good stuff! you've managed that seemingly effortl...good stuff! you've managed that seemingly effortless trick of conjuring a whole scene without needing to describe much in detail, just the bit about the 'caution' signs does it all for me. and the tree straddles that happy line where the fantastical becomes somehow eminently plausible. i like that place! (call it magical realism if you like.)<BR/><BR/>perhaps a slight lack of punctuation here and there (first para esp.), but that's just nit-picking really.<BR/><BR/>i'm looking forward to some more... and i'll actually try and say something about it this time unlike my inability to comment on simian beyond 'this is good'.paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13790013685340139552noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129914935362374312005-10-21T18:15:00.000+01:002005-10-21T18:15:00.000+01:00Cell phones solely for spousal communications is O...Cell phones solely for spousal communications is OK. Brain's an attorney so we get calls often, always, not as bad as some I've seen though. <BR/><BR/>I hate it when I'm out with someone and they just pull out the phone and start dialing someone. I feel I am owed the explanation of whom they NEED to call during their time out with me. It's inviting someone else into our date ergo I have a right to know who, right? Bastards. Burn you cell phone bastards.<BR/><BR/>One more thing...I LOATHE it when I am walking and people are walking around me talking like they are schizophrenics on their goddamned ear piece phones, I think they're talking to me I POLITELY RESPOND only to notice that the person doesn't even notice any living thing around him/her but is talking to someone on the FRICKIN phone. Grr.<BR/><BR/>Trees are awesome center pieces for stories. (I have hugged a few). Full of life...green = verdance, hope, immortality, etc. Maybe I'll try a story with a younger appeal some time.Nimiweyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16396396896116073512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129877915927956472005-10-21T07:58:00.000+01:002005-10-21T07:58:00.000+01:00Not to be awkward or unfair - simply my criticism ...Not to be awkward or unfair - simply my criticism is not that constructive at the moment so it's not worth mentioning. I'll keep reading until I figure it out.Gopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00551325087586805376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129843954623679802005-10-20T22:32:00.000+01:002005-10-20T22:32:00.000+01:00Well I still won't criticise, and I agree with the...Well I still won't criticise, and I agree with the concessions remark.Gopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00551325087586805376noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129843825846674542005-10-20T22:30:00.000+01:002005-10-20T22:30:00.000+01:00Sadly I got my first mobile about a year ago due t...Sadly I got my first mobile about a year ago due to increasing pressure from Rebecca who wanted to be able to contact me incase of emergencies - unsurprisingly she's pretty much the only person who I phone and she's the only person who calls me.<BR/>Strange comment Gopher, a story's a story whether it's a children's one or not. Making 'concessions' to children is a mistake so if it doesn't work for adults it won't work for kids.<BR/>Cheers for the observation Danny, you're bang on with how the scene works, I particularly pleased as I hadn't planned it until it was written and I though the same thing. It's given me a who new direction - as has reading an insert in The Independent called 'Disappearing World'paulhdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07927319711682494407noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129841040920400182005-10-20T21:44:00.000+01:002005-10-20T21:44:00.000+01:00Nothing like sitting out to dinner with someone wh...Nothing like sitting out to dinner with someone while he's talking on his goddamned phone while I look at my feet. NOT THAT IM BITTER.Nimiweyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16396396896116073512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129839094586072592005-10-20T21:11:00.000+01:002005-10-20T21:11:00.000+01:00Well you know I like this bit, but I didn't especi...Well you know I like this bit, but I didn't especially go into a lot of detail about why... I think it's because it seems kind of pagan, in a Wicker Man kind of way, or the river boat scene from The Night of the Hunter. It's quite powerful for it... Sorry should have said that the other day, but I didn't express it very well...Dannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11783924982506695153noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7433006.post-1129838574738967152005-10-20T21:02:00.000+01:002005-10-20T21:02:00.000+01:00I don't think I'm able to criticise a childrens st...I don't think I'm able to criticise a childrens story. <BR/><BR/>I've made some amendments based on your suggestions. <BR/><BR/>I may put up a completely seperate part later though. Good criticism is always good!Gopherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00551325087586805376noreply@blogger.com