Thursday, February 01, 2007

Zombie of the Great Unwashed page 1

As I've not heard that I shouldn't post this I've decided to go put up the 1st page from Zombie of the Great Unwashed with a bit of added commentary. cFirst panel and the face should've been bigger to make more impact, but there was a fair bit to put in the rest of the panels and quite a bit of dialogue (Jason likes dialogue and I like Jason's dialogue so even though he was fine with changes I tried to avoid them) as well as the title. I thought about having dramatic lighting or a black background to make it jump out, and play against the everyday settings, but in the end went with sparse background (intentional for once!) and my usual heavy inking for Hugo. The large word balloon's had a missing word artlessly shoved in driving home the need to sort out an art package on my Mac. Lack of background in the next panel might not get the point across that this scene is in a Job Centre. Pulling back to show more of the setting would've helped but I think the main characters are small enough. The guy in the star t-shirt is from a comic I did waaaay back, sad to see him all washed up, but them's the breaks. Last tier's a bit crushed (particularly p4 with it's questionable foreshortening!), but I wanted p2 to run the width of the page, so it had to be. The last panel was originally meant to be the first panel of the next page but I got all 'meta-panelly'.

3 comments:

Andrew Glazebrook said...

If this is superb...

kelvingreen said...

I can't spot a probelm with foreshortening in p4, to be honest. Maybe it's a bit distorted, but I've put that down to your style (which I love) rather than an error. It certainly doesn't jump out as an error.

paulhd said...

Cheers Andrew.
You're right Kelvin, it's not really an error just a cheat. I think Derek is smaller than even the foreshortening would allow, but I had to fit the word balloon in. But now it will haunt me.... forever! Ok, not really.